In the holidays me and my family went to the Easter Show for my birthday. It was so much fun because I went on the big rides and the thing that I liked about it was that I had so much fun. I really liked going to the easter show because I like to do things with my family.
The big rides were scary and fun. After the big rides we had something to eat. I did not want a snack after the ride because I wasn’t hungry. When they had finished eating I went for a another ride.
I really like going to the easter show. I wish that next time we would do it again for my birthday.
The big rides were scary and fun. After the big rides we had something to eat. I did not want a snack after the ride because I wasn’t hungry. When they had finished eating I went for a another ride.
I really like going to the easter show. I wish that next time we would do it again for my birthday.
2 comments:
Well done Ata, great start to the term.
I like that you have written in paragraphs and have varied your sentence beginnings in the first paragraph.
I want to see you continue like this next time you write. You have set your standard now.
Hey Ata,
What an awesome story. I am so happy that you enjoyed your-self at the Easter show. It sounds like fun. I wish that I went too. The only thing thats missing is a little more writing but other then that I like everything else.
:) From Quziyah (:
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